I just read that outloud to one of my best friends and she didn't understand the Oedipus Rex reference at first. I explained it and she told me-

Artists are nutters, who have to make pictures to explain things.

I tend to agree.

This was good, i love the classical reference, i love the blatant sexuality, i love the short and blunt ness of it.

Good God. That's brilliant incest.

Interesting...I'm not sure why, but I really like this. I can't put my finger on it, but there's definitely something about it.

Although if this is a haiku, I think you got the syllables wrong (isn't it 5-7-5?).

beautiful, shocking. definetley an original summary of oedipus.

for something that has "failed" in its descrption I have to say that its really fucking successful. Really hard hitting lines.
Great work.

what a literary slash. it's beautiful, and brilliant, and packs such a punch. i guess it's not a haiku at all, but that doesn't give it any less value. i love, love it.

twisted and powerful.. well done

Really don't comprehend it. Guess thats why in your summary you said "failed haiku".

ha i don't why but this is like listening to that pretty girl in second block english laugh ohsobitterly.

(hm...)

Creepy... *shivers* Nice job though.

I would have loved to have my english teacher this year teach Oedipus. It would have been so much deeper and involved, but what has passed has passed. Now to the poem.

Failed haiku huh? Oh well, go modern! I'm sure you can have a four-line haiku, especially since the last line is so short. I've even see one line haiku.

Oh, I love how you twist ancient myths/plays/tragedies with modern aspects. It's screaming and bitter, and oh so frank.

(how did this end up so long?)

You've crammed it all into four short lines-but it's as beautiful as it could ever be.

Wonderful job. I love it.

♥ Alice

yours are just as great (:

i always loved the way you put things in clean cut terms

'mazing. so deep. its almost like you fitted the whole myth (without the sphinx n shit) in 4 lines. i envy people who can do that.

oh, the lust. this is really sexy in the wrong way, but who cares what's wrong and right, anymore.