Nice poem. Good way of telling a story of a locked heart.

~Twilight Starr~

I love that line. "because it takes a dangerous pick
to unlock your heart." brilliant.

Ooh, I love the last stanza of this - it's very quotable. I love how I can hear this crescendo as he's taking the steps two at a time, and it is like there's an orchestra playing the score to this scene. Very cool. Keep writing! :)

great. i love the metaphor. nicenice.

there's something almost musical about this and many enchanting lines. i especially love "but he's already taking the stairs/two at a t i m e." very cool and thought-provoking work.-aly

"his voice is like the deep nighttime piano melodythat your mother used to sing to youas you tried to fall asleepand forget."I love this stanza. There is something beautiful about it that stands out from the rest of the poem.

Great emotion throughout the entire thing, it was very real. :)

wow... amazing emotion and very well written! i really like the lines "his voice is like the deep nighttime piano melody/that your mother used to sing to you".

Wow. The extended metaphor of the piano as his voice was brilliantly executed, and the last two lines were just amazing. Simply wow.

marie