Reviews for Chained to the Shadows

Reviews For: Chained to the Shadows

Crying-Without-Tears 2008-01-07 ch 1,	abuseoh this is sad
life on rewind 2007-10-24 ch 1,	abuseThanks for your review this morning, I'm still at school, but due to lunchtimes I have found some time to give you some luffly concrit ^_~ I thought this poem was awesome due to the idea behind it, originality is slowly leaving and it's nice to know that people can still come up with amazingly original idea. I loved the line "Stitched lips hungering to speak up above the lies" ... it just seems to TRUE somehow. Punctuation. It expresses places where you want the reader to pause and helps with flow and metre. If you dislike using punctuation, I respect that, but if you’re open to comments then maybe you should consider this one! I'd like to see you experiment with more free verse a bit, crazy line breaks etc. I think you'd be good at it. Thanks for favouriting me, I hope to return the favour someday. -Sakura
a silenced revolution 2007-06-13 ch 1,	abuseHow sad... But I like this, I thought the word choice/imagery was quite good. Well done. Keep writing.
Knightmage 2007-05-23 ch 1,	abuseokay, thats absolute freakish like poem. AWESOME!! Knightmage
ecwix 2007-05-13 ch 1,	abuseI like the mood that you generate with your words, like "stitched" and "wallow", well, you get the point. Hmm, and the message inside is interesting as well. Good job!
Enigmatic Night 2007-03-14 ch 1,	abuseWell written, and interesting. Thought provoking to say the least, gives one an odd sense of recollection (a reminder of times when you felt as though it was you against the world, a sense of negligence) I mean how many times have we all pretended to be fine, someone once said that "nothing" is where everything resides. When someone says it's "nothing" it's everything. So while you're trying to keep up false facades, there is a certain internal decay that leaves you... empty. Good work. L.L
Scarlet Dragoness 2007-01-06 ch 1,	abuseGirl, your good! You have such beauty and emotion in all your works and I am off to read more! keep it up! You're amazing
Paws 2006-11-16 ch 1, anon.	abuse...Sounds like high school to me. Sorry. Sorry for being so goofy. Anyway, I told you I would read some more, didn't I? This one is...wow. Depressing, but you know, in a good way. I'm not really an angst fan, but, of course, this is really well-written and sounds like something someone (a high school student) would actually say! (Right before comitting suicide, but still...) Actually, it reminds me of this boy I sit across from on the bus. He just sits there all alone, looking out the window. T.T He makes me want to adopt puppies and orphaned babies, and so does this poem. I can imagine a picture to go with it, too. Another thing: Freeverse! Yay! I can't stand poems with cheesy rhymes... ~Paws
Atheneon 2006-11-11 ch 1,	abuseDid it just get cold in here? Wow, again you project emotion and feel very well. A powerful piece that makes me want to find someone esle just to talk to so I know that I'm not forgotten. How scary to be abandoned to neglect. (shiver)
brokendreams21 2006-10-22 ch 1,	abuseI like the use of symbolism (like the mask) in this. This piece is quite meaningful, although it's also really dark. I gave up a while ago reading things that were too dark. Yet...your piece was still beautiful in that dark way. Kinda hard to explain. Transporting us to dark places indeed. Good job.
dustytiger 2006-08-29 ch 1,	abusewow, you are a very talented writer, in such a short peice you have packed quiet the punch, this is a truely amzing peice, thank you for the review and thank you for sharing
simply meg 2006-08-19 ch 1,	abusecool stuff. I really liked this poem, very dark. write On!

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