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| Icicle Tears 2007-06-29 ch 1,  | abuseSo vivid, so real. It seemed to me as if this was really happening when I read it. The pictures in my mind were rapid and connected, but they seemed as if they were completely random, as well. Hrm. Oh, and there's one grammar error. "Dear Evelyn?/You fall for the hunter/who SETS traps without a victim/in mind" It should be SETS not STETS, I believe. Not sure though. -Icicle Tears |
| silent-distress 2007-04-02 ch 1, | abuseVery powerful ending. |
| S. Ben Beach 2007-02-20 ch 1, | abusethis reminds me in a way of a song called "The Seduction" by He Is Legend for some really strange reason.. probably because of the title. But the imagery is truly amazing, and the references are creative and aren't cliched. Which is definitely a good thing! |
| Fact or Fiction 2006-11-01 ch 1, | abuseYet another gorgeous poem. I'm afraid my review won't be as long as the last one, but I want to write one anyways. Loved it, and Evelyn is a favourite name of mine. Your poems have this unique quality to them, it's so hard to describe, they have an almost medievil feel to them, in that they are so well thought out and descriptive. The last line was my favourite, and I just can't say enough about how awesome this poem was. Happy writing, Fact or Ficiton |
| Awen1923 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abuseYou have a good use of imagery in your poem, and definetly create a mood. I also liked the use animal metaphors--they work well. Like others, I think your last line is very well done. |
| unspecified 2006-10-23 ch 1, | abusewow...you show a nice way with your words. nice job |
| AK the Twilight 2006-10-08 ch 1, | abuseThis poem has some very good use of suspense and rhythm. However, some of the lines like "scarred from self-destruction" seems to take away the very primal feel of the poem. Just try to stay focus on the topic and not get distracted with these types of lines. Outside of that, this is very good and does a great job in portraying a suspense filled mood. Overall, great job. |
| Pretty Peaceful 2006-10-07 ch 1, | abusethankyou so much for your review.. yeah i agree it would be so good if guys could see that sort of thing as sexy... but anyway. oh... i just love this poem. especially the last line. just beautiful. really, really, really well done. peace adn so much love from holly. |
| Camilleta 2006-10-07 ch 1, | abuseI love the first and last lines... well, and the rest. ^_^ |
| poemkitten7 2006-09-30 ch 1, | abuseOMG, this has such amazing sybolism. I absolutely love the haunting yet beautiful imagery. Keep it up! =) ~Sara |
| The Intelligent Designer 2006-09-26 ch 1, | abuseI really envy your ability to make almost everything a metaphor. How do you do it? There are a number of people out in the world that are like this, and I never understand them. I got an image of people like your friend when I read this. You have talent. |
| autumnmurder 2006-09-24 ch 1, | abuseIt's been said before, obviously, but this is very beautiful. I adored the line: "love softened eyes". Thank you for taking the time to review my work, also. |
| fairytale failure 2006-09-22 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful with a hint of morbid. *is too speechless to write lengthy review* and I think it is the ideal length for a poem. |
| BearHeart 2006-09-08 ch 1, | abuseHaunting. Your choice of imagery really makes the story. I really enjoy the unique way you say what you have to say. |
| Talhiri Serrano 2006-08-31 ch 1, | abuseVery touching, in the emotion. It's hard when you can't say these things to a friend, even though you want to or know you should... |