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We Called Her Thalia 2006-08-23 . chapter 1
Je vais essayé d'ecrire ce en francais, mais comme toi, ma deuxieme langue n'est pas bon de tous. Je doit dis que je peu pas comprendre les sentiments de cette poeme, parce que je ne suis pas religieux et je pense que chaque personne a un version de dieu unique, mais je pense que c'est impoli de critiqué votre croiyances. Donc, j'ai seulement un chose a dire. Je pense que si tu veux expressé un opinion personel, fait le en votre premiere langue. Si non, le message est perdu ou tes mots deviens si simple que c'est difficile de prendre le poeme sérieusement. Je dois applaudir que tu utilise un autre langue, mais avant que tu senté plus confidante avec votre usage de la lange francais, lessé le un practique personnel.
hey maria 2006-08-21 . chapter 1
I'm so proud of myself for understanding this.

I'm not sure if your French was entirely correct, but I understood most of what you were saying, so your grammar must be okay. But I think your poem needs some work. Basically what you've done here is repeat that God is good almost every other line. I liked the idea of how it doesn't matter what language you say it in: God is always good. But you need to vary the way you say this, make it a little more descriptive, and try to show why God is good rather than tell. That's what makes poetry special -- you're supposed to paint a picture with your words so everyone can see rather than hear what you have to say.
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