I agree with everyone else, truly a beautiful peice of work. I love the first and second stanzas the most. Great job!

oh, wow. gorgeously done. i love that little kids can often see things that we've lost among the jumble of growing up and (unfortunately) relizing that there's more to life than "pretty". love that last line! -xan

This is very beautiful. I love the last line. Keep writing.

Quite nice. Empowering.