Hmm. I liked this poem, and the concept. The only problem I had with it was when you wrote "I’m loving(Hating)". I think it would have been more effective as "I'm loving (hating)".

Also, the reason I put Angels Up There under romance? *grins* I'm not sure, I think I felt the poem could be interpreted as if someone's down in the darkness and they're speaking to the happy people. (You know, those celebrities who appear at TV for some life-changing reason or another), or as if there's a girl, clinging to the shadows of the man she loved...damn, I've got to stop inspiring myself!

Well, anyway, thanks for the review, I like this poem, but it didn't move me so much that I would put it on my favorites list (I know I'm a bad, bad person, but we're allowed to have opinions, aren't we?) and some of your other works are purely amazing.

~Fading Innocence

'dazzle me with your hypocrisy'

P.S. Have you attempted to get published?

it is true. & it hurts too much.

'you were there with me as we watched the sky fall apart and its blood soaked through our skin.' ** powerful, raw and beautiful imagery there, i love that line and it's a perfect beginning. 'it penetrated me, but not as deep as you did (baby)' -- raw and perfect and incredibly beautiful line. i love the rawness and format of this. 'and do you even know how you make me feel? you inspire love and trust and torment (at not being able to say these things out loud)' -- pure feeling and raw emotion expressed beautifully and it's absolutely perfect, as always. 'and i'm loving(hating) every second of this ecstasy (i'm high ((on you)).' -- possibly the best line ever. i'm high on you -- amazing. 'press your lips to mine and make me believe you love me (when really, you're just looking for a fling).' no, no, it hurts too much to read that. for some reason this hurts me. just the power and beauty and the format is brilliant, as always. **, this is incredible.

you inspired me. as always, your poetry makes me feel so much and i can relate to so much of it that i always get an idea for a poem when i read it. and i want to thank you for that.

♥ alison

I like both the subtle and specific contradictions of this. It really delves into the reality of most relationships, and the reader can identify easily with the emotions and interactions portrayed. Nice work. Format, as always, is marvelously done.