are these songs you wrote? is that why the parenthesis are there? This one's kind of disturbing but good disturbing. It had deep emotion. It's very raw and a little raunchy.. haha. The way you turned sex into disturbing things is incredible. This is better than the other poem of yours I read.
..aleX..

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you are a ** brilliant writer. i hope you know that. from the title to the rawness to the pain and beauty to the format to the way your words scream and say so much, i want you to know that i admire you and your writing so ** much and everything you write is incredible.

your review - i was so glad to hear that i'm able to inspire you. especially since i love your writing, so the more from you the better.

of course you can post the piece ... my poem should be up tomorrow, hopefully.

anyway, about this poem. 'it's an ** in my mouth.' ** brilliant, i love that line. 'and rip me (my lips bleeding) open (find the good inside me any way you have to).' for some reason that hurt to read -- ** raw and painful and just absolutely brilliant. 'bury yourself within me (dig your own grave in my insides)' -- i love that, the imagery and just the way you worded it. 'you'll be reborn (re.in.car.nated) again. i'll be the virgin, you be my angel (or just a devil in disguise?' brilliant lines. 'and desecrate me with your seed (the well of evil overflowing to our young).' i ** love the imagery and raw powerful of that line.

this is amazing. i love all your writing, and this is no exception.

♥ alison

um...should this be rated "M" instead? That's all I can think of..

It's eh very eh...graphical. and um nice metaphors. yes. okay. I get the message...

This is a very strange poem.