intoxicating words, beautiful ideas. Really well done. seriously, wow.

I just read the entire collection and I must say I'm impressed. The last line on this section seemed to spell it all out in a paradox, it leaves me amid the confusion that you seem to feel. (or at least, that's what I gather)

(by the way: this is the new account for .Acid)

*shocked* that's really good! (better than mine too!) *cries until insanity goes*

wow, very powerful ending. and the spacing, the breaking up of the words, adds a great effect.

"Using my weakness/To make her feel better."

hm, yes, i like that and i can definitely relate. when i read this in my head, i find it to be ... edgy but blunt.

Clever structure and wordplay. Well written, good job.

I really enjoyed reading this. I loved the first line particularly. “Snakes on your tongue…” What a brilliant line. I also really like the way this poem feels. To me, it feels honest, real, and poignant. This doesn’t feel like something a poet made up. It feels like something a poet lived. Keep up the good work!

All of these were really pretty!

Pretty good.

wow, really powerful, you convey emotion and create images so well, i really like the lines "Twisting fingers in her hair/ As she plays with my eyes,/ Twisting fingers in my mind." and "No way to tell if the room is spinning/ Or if she's spinning me." Keep up the good work! *adds to author alert list*