|Reviews for Present|
| Femme de Dieu 10/27/06 . chapter 1
Okay, the two people who only reviewed the last in this series...they missed out, because of the three, I think this one is best! The cadence is nearly perfect. Only one spot where it faltered in my ear was in the third stanza, second line. My "suggestion" and it's only that, might be to change it to read "something like" "I wake with a tear; you hear me scream." But that may skew your meaning, I don't know. But see what you think.
But I did love the message as well. Very positive to let go of the past, appreciate the present and look forward to the future. The second line "The fragments float in unknown mist" is beautiful.
Thanks for the review, I will be back to check out more as time permits. How did you find me, by the way? I'm always curious as to what brings readers, especially those who review, to my page. ) Oh! And thanks for the fav!