Very enticing style. I was intrigued by the dialogue being bolded and the way that sometimes it was third person, sometimes it was first-person. Very cool trick of emotions. I was surprised by the ending, "he didn't even know my name."

-stix-

Amazing.
Perfect.
You're really talented; I can tell just by this poem.
GREATJ OB!

This was truly amazing. This goes straight to my favorites' list - not to mention, I have to add that this is amazing for being the first thing for me to ever review on this account I have. It's amazing and I love it and I cannot wait to read more from you. It has to be one of the most emotional, well-written things I have ever read on FP, especially for a poem. I haven't written or really read poetry in so long and now wanting to get back into the "poetry world" or whatever the heck it's going to be called I'm glad this was the first thing I read. Okay, I'm rambling but yeah, I love this. It's amazing. You seem like you're an amazing poet. Go you! You rock! Haha, I really had no idea what to say in this review, by the way.

I love you, Alice. You make me cry.

~meredith

This was very interesting. I found myself lost in it, even though I can't relate. (I'm horribly sorry, though)

Nice use of italics, bolds, underling, spaces, and periods, as well. It's an interesting style.

Keep writing

First of all:
This is just about the most emotional, saddest, heartbreaking stories I've ever read.
Second of all:
The way you have the font and everything is amazing and adds to the story. I love it.
Third of all:
I am SO sorry! ='(

~Black and White Dreams~

This is one of the most amazing things I have read in so long. Really, really well done.

Spectacular job on this.

In one of the other reviews, someone mentioned that you rely too much on formatting to tell the story, but I think that's really your..."thing." It's what helps to make the words passion. They're just that; passion.

I loved the flow, and the utter pain involved in your writing. Good piece, I enjoyed it. Although, even if I hadn't, it still would have been amazing.

Kerstyn

wow, that's deep. i love it though^.^ and you said you could'nt write story-type stuff. -.-; hmph, liar. j/p it's VERY good
mwa!
~kharris

Oh...

My...

God.

I write poetry myself, but it doesn't even come close to this! i love the use of underlining, italics and bold to make it all complicated looking. you might not have meant it to seem that way, but i think that it makes your poem look like it's a puzzle made of different, misshaped pieces and pieces that will never ever match, like life seems.

i love this. it really got to me. *adds to favourites*

Alice and Sarah. awesome pair.

Great job. You create the anger so that it's clear, and out there. I also love how you put parentheses inside parentheses, I've never seen that done before, and I think it's creative. Anyway, like I said, fantastic job!

Peace and Love

~> Lifted

ohgod. this is so painful. i have tears in my eyes, literally. this was a perfect link to put on your profile because it tells so much. i'm sorry. it's gorgeous. but so ** painful.

I disagree about the formatting - it's what makes this piece stand out. Well, one of the things. The only suggestion I can make is to keep writing, because I can't find anything wrong with it, but I'm sure you can ;). Writers are funny that way.

I like it, but I think you're relying too much on formatting to tell the story. You're using quite a few good images and portraying everything with strength, so it's almost a letdown to see so much formatting when you could let your words speak for themselves.

Other than that, very evocative.

.:midnight:.

It seems like the only true part of a relationship is the heartbreak.

You made me think of why I've abandoned relationships and in turn followed the term, 'free love' and how many times I've whispered those damning words 'but you're the only one I want.'

Thanks, love. You're absolutely gorgeous in the way you just keep adding and adding your emotions until your readers can barely comprehend the poem.

Have a wonderful day,
S.B.