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| EvaEvita 2006-08-30 ch 4,  | abuseIt great! I look forward to more installments. Have fun writing~ Bethalina |
| Lily Llynn 2006-08-29 ch 1, | abusecontinue. NOW. or else. (: |
| EvaEvita 2006-08-29 ch 3, | abuseIt's good. I need a bit more to see where this is going, but I think it could turn out really great! Keep on writing~ Bethalina. |
| Lost in the Funhouse 2006-08-27 ch 2, | abuseI've really never read a whole bunch about King Authur. I have read I Am Morgan le Fay, by... Someone Springer, but that's about it. So I'll most definetely be a fresh mind to read. Sentences are kind of choppy and there could have been more descriptions, especially in the paragraphs that only have one sentence. For example, "The girl was the village elder’s daughter, the boy a blacksmith’s son, yet they remained playmates." Why did they remain playmates? Since she's the elder's daughter, is she like royalty or something? Anyway, short but interesting beginning. I'd like to see where you go with this. |