I LOVE the first stanza, and my only suggestion would be to cut the first line and add it somewhere else. It's less strong than the second line (but still very good). This is a "think hard" poem, and I read it a few times. It makes sense on the surface read, but it's got a lot of depth as well. Nice job.

Wow! That was intense.

Wishing you Good Health And Plenty Of Wealth, ~SirScott~

ooh, great poem. and i like your penname, by the way :D

First off, wonderful summary. The tone in this is true and loud and relatable. I like how you go from stark to specific descriptions, to describe personalities, outlooks, and exterior traits. Well written. Good work.

I love this poem. I liked the summary especially. The imagery (in the poem, not the summary) was very vivid, and the words flowed really well.

Ooh. High school in 150 words or less. One more year and we're free. Sometimes I have to remind myself that. I had to go to school for schedule changes and to buy my books today and I saw many schoolmates-- Freaky freshman, slutty sophomores, and juvenile juniors. Anyway, just seeing those elitist douchce strudles is enough to make my head spin. They just do that to get people to like them, and where do they end up after that? Knocked up and living on the street-- At least that's how it's done in Flint :P But why do we care? These mindless zombies, saluting "with flair..." I would continue, but I realize I said a whole lot of nothing. I do believe I love you.

douche strudel is my new favorite phrase. I loved this poem because the image that sprung to my mind when I was reading this was the bland faces of EVERY single freshmen girl at my highschool. They all look the same, sound the same, their names are all really similar. Good job!