I didn't find the repition necessary at all but I like the poem. It's a strong peice. I love when you put away in parenthesis. It added potency and emphasis

nicely done.

Somethings you just can't win.

Wishing You Good Health And Plenty Of Wealth, SirScott

Hm. If this is to be a song, I think it needs to be just a touch longer. But that's just me...Thanks for reviewing my poem. And to reply to you...Yeah. I hope I'm okay too...Rowan