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its not Catie its Cady 2008-07-07 ch 1,	abuseAww I really liked it. It's really cute. A nice modern twist on a fairy tale!
emerald 2008-01-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseAww, that was cute! And cooking and honesty, just perfect!
Brown Eyed Goddess 2007-11-15 ch 1,	abuseThis was so cute! I love the ending. I feel bad for the Prince who kept on referring to his notes. Yeah, the King did lose a lot of money doing this! The $10,0, fire, wedding... This is a great children's story. Whatcha mean by, "Well, not exactly.."? Keep writing, you're really good!
Dexterity 2007-10-23 ch 1,	abuseHaha, that was really funny. 21st century marriage contests sure are a lot of fun! I felt sorry for Prince Cole and his notes (thinks about my own boring self and that pile of science textbooks on my desk...well, at least I know they are boring and won't want to talk about them). Oh well, back to your story: I think it was great! The humour and the simple writing style all contributed to a bright smile to start off my day! Good job! I'm new to fp and am a beginner in writing original fiction, so if you have some time in your hands, can you please give me some feedback on my story "Beyond the Horizon"? It's only if you have time though; I can completely understand if you don't. Anyway, thanks for the story that totally made my day. I'll be looking forward to future stories by you!
rosefaerie 2007-06-29 ch 1,	abuseOh, that was really sweet. Yay, they lived happily ever after. Yeah I know what you mean. Keep writing! Rosefaerie
The Mumbling Sage 2007-02-17 ch 1,	abuseHa-ha! Short but entertaining. I kept thinking that I'd like to see this written out in play format...it has that quirky immidiacy to it.
blissfulrain 2007-02-16 ch 1,	abuseLovely story. It was cute and charming. Prince Ayden even though he was a prince resembled a regular guy and so did the princess. I liked that. I might just read this to my little sister later.
EvilFlyingJester 2006-11-27 ch 1, anon.	abuseWith a little work this could be a great childrens book! I like it. ^^ Thanks for the review! ~Kay~
suzibean 2006-11-03 ch 1,	abuseNice story, cute. It could be better with a more explored ending- but it was nice anyway.
CaMiAk 2006-10-03 ch 1,	abuseshort and to the point, yup. Sorry I'm not very good at reviews
Susurrent Threnody 2006-09-17 ch 1,	abuseah, yes, isn't the 21st century wonderful? No Cohen the barbarians here, no siree! Hmm, you really like excamation points, don't you. sngk only 13/75 princes left? Man the male half of the sepcies is sad. I love the fire brigade. They are my freinds. Probably the king's freinds too at this point. Dang, the king is giong broke on this. First he has to rebuild the kitchen. Then he looses $10,0 to greedy princes. My goodness. Those two really kind of rushed into a marriage, didn't they? But then again, this is the 21st century. People get married all the time on short notice. You could have had them run away to Las Vegas, Nevada U.S and get married by Elvis. That would have been good. But this is supposed to be a children's book thingamabober, so never mind.
Humaysha 2006-09-13 ch 1, anon.	abuseHey, wow i liked the story, really cool, i like the way you decided to give the princes down to earth tasks. it was interesting. Do you know what it reminded me of? it reminded me of that book Cinderellis and the Glass Hill by Gail Carson Levine, you know the one where all the princes have to climb the glass hill to get the princess who's waiting at the top but the only catch is that she always smears it with oil or something like that. isn't that cool. well i g2g, homework and stuff.luv ya lots, Humaysha
xo-pauli-ox 2006-09-12 ch 1,	abusehah kute!! a twist on cinderella n humour etc.. realli guud =D gud work
Peter Harrison 2006-09-06 ch 1,	abuseVery nice. It's a good combination of humour, story telling, and good dialogue. I enjoyed it! Peter
Ame Lockheart 2006-09-02 ch 1,	abusevery cute! I liked the idea of a modern twist and the line about the princes being noble and princess-saving!very well written for such a short piece. If you wanted to make it less hurried, you could rewrite it longer, but that's just me!btw: I got lots of inspiration in summer physics class. I took it too. God, it was aweful!

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