I just had to say a big thank you for writing this story. I've sat here soaking up each and every word until I reached the end. I loved it, and I also loved the characters.

Great, great job. :D

Oh dear. You know, I knew where this story was going as soon as the title was explained in chapter 3. Still, I was hoping that I'd be wrong. It's beautiful and sad, especially with Violet getting the last word. Oh well. That's what, four reviews? I would've left more, but it seemed kind of silly to leave a review for each chapter when I was reading them all as a whole. It shows that you've put a lot of work into this story; it feels planned and thought-out. On top of which it's very well written. I don't think there's anything to complain about, style-wise. I'll be very interested in reading anything else you might put up here.

Also extremely curious about your age after having read your profile. ;) Seeing as you don't think anyone would read your work if they knew your age, you must perceive your supposed readers as either significantly older or younger than you are. I'm terribly sorry for being so off topic, but I'm going to take a guess and say that you're a lot younger than one would think. Haha.

Anyways, keep up the very good work, and hope you post something new soon.

This chapter reminds me of Les enfants terribles; the loft being The Room, as it were. Not quite as surreal though. Although having said that, there is the question of Violet's sanity. And Sid's, come to think of it. That's the problem when you've got a room - or a loft - that forms the whole world; the other people you need to create a norm to measure the room's (loft's) inhabitants by are absent.

So far, Violet feels consistent, but Sid doesn't. This might be something that I'm creating in my own little world of flowers, but in chapter one, Sid strikes me as the archetype of someone who makes a living out of what most people consider private and meaningful; he's emotionally disattached, cold and cynical. I'm not minding the change in him, not at all. I just suppose I would've thought that his cynicism was a front that he would keep at some level even as he slowly let Violet penetrate it, but he seems to drop it completely. Especially as he seemed to have formed his previously most important relationship (Bella, although I might be reading too much into their short interaction) with someone who accepts him for "what" he is, rather than "who" he is.

Anyways, I'm still very much liking this story. It's well written and easy to follow, not to mention compulsive (notice that I'm still reading it, despite having "better" things to do). So yeah... I guess I'll continue reading it now. :)

Wow. This is really, really interesting, aswell as pleasantly well-written. I love the change of the narrative's first person, and how Violet seems honestly confused about what's going on. I think a lot of people attempting to do that don't really pull it off, but this is very well done. From someone who mostly reads and posts slash here on fictionpress, the originality of this story is a breath of fresh air. I'm probably going to have to read the rest of this story now despite having things to do that need more urgent attention. Oh well, who needs sleep anyway, right?

Will probably be back with more reviews later. ;)

What a fantastic story. Seriously, it not only had an original storyline, but it was gripping and intelligently written. I didn't even mind the ending being sad. Great job!

Wow. To think I'd almost forgotten about your story.
Happens when you don't bookmark stories, I think.

Huh. Anyways, you're right about the depressing outcome, but I think there's a certain conclusive part of the ending and a certain open aired wonder.

Which is good. I'm sorry I haven't replied until now.

Come to think of it: I would love for you to read and review my most recentshort story,A Tulip for a Violet. If I had to guess, I'd say it shouldbe done by the spring, if not earlier.
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Quite off, aren't you there? But the thing is it didn't have to be any longer.

I confess making Sid kill Vince had made me wonder how this would end, but it turned out all right. Well, sort of.

I'd say it's hard to explain that.


And now I wish I could further see your profile. Unfortunately fictionpress is messed up for me and leaves 'Stories Authored' inert to the click so I can't view any of your other work.

>.> Oh well.

-Serenade

PS: I feel like crying. Almost. That really was sad, but fitting.

I loved it. Honestly loved it. It was such a contrast from "Drained Of Her"; it showed how many different writing styles you're capable of. You've mastered them completely. I also love the character development and plotlines (I know, I know, I sound like my English teacher...)

All in all, I'm proud of you, Jor!

I honestly love it. I'm hooked. Way to keep me on the edge of my seat, you.

this is my favorite cause of the naked lunch reference

...so thats a naked lunch *barfs*

no seriously how do you come up with this stuff??!!

I'd crtique you but as an avid reader who isn't nitpicky about what she reads I can find nothing to critique.

alrighty,let me just say to you thata) i love youb) this is a great storyc)i cant belive you wrote thisd) if you write this way now i cant wait to see how you write when your twentye)all your english teachers should let you by with an A+ even if you skip all their classesf) your going to be the first teenager to ever win Pulitzer Prize in writingg)I LOVE YOU!h) im not lying even a little bit

seriously though your gonna be like that book School Story (read it?) and your going to be published at age 15

loves ya to death-kisa

I really love this short story- I'm checking back every day for updates!

I'm loving all the character developments, the plotline, wow, it's just amazing!

Well, I can't say this is my favorite chapter for Violet. Sid, on the other hand was all right.

I mean, it wasn't very surprising, but nor was it entirely boring. =/ Problem is, I don't exactly know what to say about improving or complimenting.

I like Rita's pad though. xD Funny.

Like you said, alot happened in this chapter. The part with Sid was one I had expected to come sooner or later, but it fit.

Interesting chapter, I found myself agreeing with all parties of the story, and at the same time wondering what was going to happen to all parties. It's a shame that Sid got caught, as well as Violet, but of course that all plays a part.