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PM20 2007-07-22 ch 1,	abusePowerful and well-written, I like the imagery it paints a vivid picture throughout the poem.
Manuel Fajar 2007-07-12 ch 1,	abuseWell-written and true and sad. You express raw pain with raw words. manuel p.s. a little haiku for you: that which we let go was yesterday's summer moon,— upon fields of hay.
the naked civil servant 2007-05-05 ch 1,	abuse"i'm so brilliantly ** weak (but you knew that already)" all of this is wrongly empathic right now. i wonder if i am reading my own meaning into it, but eitherway it's extremely powerful writing.
lucidspiritdreamer7 2006-11-27 ch 1,	abuseA beatiful ,sentimental,tearjerker for me. you are a really great writer.if you consider any of those three things I listed a weakness, you are so wrong, those are wonderful strengths.I will try to post mine as soon as I can.Michelle
crazy dog events 2006-11-13 ch 1,	abuse"if you love something let it go. If it comes back, you know you're loved." But it's one of those sad/funny human truths that they never come back, not really. I think this could be tightened up- Some of it just seems like trim- but the idea is nice.
A Perfect Sonnet 2006-11-13 ch 1,	abuseThis was wonderful, I especially liked the line "like a rabbit I sent off when I was seven years old." It's just a really good line (well, two lines I guess). I'd also like to say: I liked the swear in this context. And I only bother to say that because I swear quite often in some of my poems as well, and I know that if I bothered to read the reviews on this that there are probably more than a few people who object to it. Don't listen to them. It balances out the sweetness of the rabbit metaphor, gets the point of emotion (especially of-the-moment emotion) across and gives the reader a good, unexpected jolt to make sure they're really paying attention to the ending. Nice words, my friend.
Made in U.S.A. 2006-11-13 ch 1,	abuseI love the metaphors and use of imagery. I'm back on fictionpress and i'm glad to see that you're still posting. You're still one of the best and keep writing :D
Stormer 2006-11-12 ch 1,	abuseHi there! Firstly wanted to say thanks for the review and I'm sorry about your guinea pig. Pets are pets! We have a little budgie and if he died we'd be sad too! Of course my cat was with me for 18 years of my life, that being most of my life at that point :) Anyway... This poem was beautiful, very sad of course. But there is a beauty to the bleakness you captured here. I like the mention of the rabbit. I just imagine a child haunted by that memory. Love the closing line too.
rust phoenix 2006-11-01 ch 1,	abuseShort, but I liked it. Very metaphorical. I can't really think of anything else to say, keep writing!
sarah1491 2006-10-02 ch 1,	abuseNice poem. (I really don't like profanity though, hah. It's just me though :P) Please continue to write poetry! -SaraH
crystallinegreen 2006-09-30 ch 1,	abusei love this, the idea of the rabbit really works. great work!!
Je-Nie-Dieu 2006-09-10 ch 1,	abusebrilliant. the imagery, as usual, is up to par. the rabbit is a GREAT metaphor ^_^ it draws such tenderness and pain, reminding me why i have loved your poetry for the last 2 or 3 years...wow, how has it been that long? i wonder how long you'll be here. personally, i don't plan on deleting my account any time soon. keep writing, and hopefully, keep posting!~Leonard Church
do not resuscitate 2006-09-02 ch 1,	abusei love the last four lines. 'with the foliage that spills murder' are you kidding me? that's so brilliant. the title's perfectly fitting. nice work. :)
Joewhatever 2006-09-02 ch 1,	abuseThere are some very cool things in here. Like this: like a rabbit i sent offwhen i was seven years oldyou aren't back yet and this: i succumb to my vicesbecause i don't know what else to doi'm so brilliantly ** weak (but you knew that already) *but I think this part might be a little stronger without the swear, but as is it works too. Oh and I like what you say, too. Like a stab in the heart. :D lovely.
APersonAndAHalf 2006-08-26 ch 1,	abuse"with the foliage that spills murder" That's a beautiful line, right there. Good job with this one. :)

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