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| the.pink.life 2006-09-22 ch 1,   | My favorite part of this poem is the italicizing of "fly" and the way you spaced the word - it looks like something is actually flying. That said, this is not my favorite piece of yours - "hustle and bustle" is a bit of an overused phrase, and the ending doesn't really do much for me. I did like the title a lot, though. Keep writing! :) |
| ode to a firefly 2006-08-27 ch 1, | I like the *idea* of this poem, but the poem itself isn't up to your usual standard. It reads like you thought of a really good title and a brilliant line or two, but then instead of writing them down in your notebook and waiting for some inspiration to strike, you forced them into a not-quite-ready poem. I think, with some re-wording and re-thinking, it'll be as great as your other stuff. =) ♥Christine |
| boys kiss girls 2006-08-26 ch 1, | This made me smile. I'm glad you had fun in Cali. I love airports. |
| Hell's first Icicle 2006-08-25 ch 1, | i love it.i love the imagery, and the sentiment behind it, and every other little thing. I've never been on a plane, but sumhow i can really /feel/ your poem, and itz relli wunderful. |
| Aquafied 2006-08-24 ch 1, | i always ponder in amazement that we have figured out to fly does it amaze you too? |