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Arrows 2006-08-24 . chapter 1
Good story, but be careful of redundancy, especially in your descriptions, like '...lazy PURPLE light putting a strange PURPLE haze around everything...' try to get more imaginative with your imagery. Were the flowers really 'purple-red'? I thought the line 'and how do you paint light heavy?' was clever :D. Watch out for continuety first. The boy's arms around the narrator's knees at first, but then they somehow sink to her shins? How did that happen? :P

Overall, this is an interesting piece. It's difficult to understand the narrator's motives, but not in a bad way. Good job!
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