   sylvia's syndrome 2006-08-25 . chapter 1I just wanted to review some more of your work since you were so kind to review some of mine (when I got those I was over the moon – I really admire your work and then you were PRAISING me!), and I am seriously glad I did. This piece isn’t only striking – it’s absolutely poisonous and infectious. I feel like these words have crawled beneath my skin. This is just… achingly, terribly, tragically beautiful. This is art. Keep writing! |
 by His blood 2006-08-25 . chapter 1**. you finally did it, you made me cry. so much numbness after the breakdown(s), and this made me start to cry. you did it, **, this did it.
i can't express how beautiful this is to me. it's an incredible poem, and i can't thank you enough for writing it. it's absolutely beautiful, it's perfect, and i love it so much.
'screaming out her name like a prayer, you just wish that she'd .n.o.t.i.c.e. y.o.u. and take you seriously' -- **, that beginning just hit so hard into all the places that hurt the most and i started to cry as soon as i read it. **, you expressed this so perfectly. everything, you just wrote it so beautifully and ... this is amazing.
'(tell her you love her- she'll laugh in your face again ((darling))' -- **. just ... **. '-you're serious this time (razorblade clasped in your palm, prepared to do the unthinkable-mutilation is your release)' -- how did you express this so perfectly? my thoughts, my feelings, you wrote it so beautifully -- mutilation is my release, it's all i have left. this is so beautiful.
'and wouldn't it be wonderful if she cared?' oh **, that hurts so much i can't stand it. 'lying, broken (they've shattered you) on your bathroom floor with vomit on your breath' -- how did you do that? i wrote a poem EXACTLY LIKE THAT a few days ago but never posted it. how did you manage to take everything i feel the most and make it something so beautiful, so raw and powerful and painful to read because it hits so hard and it's true? it's perfect, all of it.
'you're crying and hurting and dying a little inside each day (but what else are you going to do? run to your mommy for comfort?)' my thoughts exactly. 'but they'll never forget now, you think (smiling maniacally through your tears as the razor bites into your flesh and cuts away the ugliness)' -- cut away the ugliness, **. you did it, you expressed everything so perfectly. ***. 'they'll never forget what i've lost' (any innocence you EVER had-' how did you do that? how did you take what my name means, and write it so beautifully? 'and God's turned his back on you(they tell you)and you're a mistake-nature's mistake and we.won't.have.it-)' -- no, that hurt too much to read. you wrote it perfectly, so beautifully, this is amazing. incredible. how did you do this?
'they're trying to change you but you're stuck in your rut (maybe you'll take to hiding behind some sort of mask (you're an Actress) to convince them that you're as normal as the next girl (See, Mommy, I brought home a boy!))' -- **, ** ** **. you just wrote everything that's been screaming through my head for the past year and a half. that was incredible.
'and you .can't.get.out. because where else is there to go (it's your home or the hospital)' -- that is completely true.
**, this killed me to read because it's so true and so amazing, and so beautiful. thank you so much for writing this. this helped a lot. it's amazing.
♥ alison |
 she's so hardcore 2006-08-24 . chapter 1I really like this one. I can't say I relate, though--my problems were all my own fault.
Honestly, I wasn't creeped out by the whole bug thing. It's a little strange, yeah, but not to that point. At least not in my eyes. And I won't say I'm sorry about what happened, because I don't know you, so I can't really feel anything but the whole "the world has become an awful place" type of thing. But I'd like to talk to you more sometime.
~j. lynn |
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