Reviews for The Way of Sagans

Reviews For: The Way of Sagans

Delandred 2007-02-14 ch 3,	I haven't been on fictionpress for a while, but I read through it again and the second chapter was great again, I laughed quite a bit. The third chapter was good, but I think that youre adding too many names in in a short period, I'm already getting a bit confused, but that's probably just me. I deleted The Betrayal by accident, but it's up again and I've rewritten the prologue, could you review it for me please? BYe
ClassicTrick 2006-11-20 ch 3,	" He to is of my flesh" to should be too, but other than that great job! though its kind of hard trying to peice everything together, since you already have this world made up, very well put together may I add, and im just getting peices of it. i hope you post the full story, this whole world seems very fascinating. Waiting to read more! ~CT
Delandred 2006-11-07 ch 2,	Sorry it took me so long to review again, anyway your story was really good. Ilaughed at the bti about the cow, you wrote it well. I changed the betrayal, if you want to read it.
Delandred 2006-11-05 ch 1,	Great story, it was well written and interesting. I didnt get the part where they both use ? after brother at the start, im not great with literary devices though. I will rewrite the Betrayal, and now i'll probably write it as a story.
twilight-x 2006-10-09 ch 2,	I FINALLY read the second chapter yayy =D Hahaha, my favorite part of this story is all the arguments and conversations between your characters. Always hilarious xD
bookface31 2006-09-11 ch 2,	I like the bickering between the three brothers in chapter 2; it's very funny. There are a few grammatical errors, but those are merely misuses of commas versus semi-colons. And I DO know my way around a semi-colon. If you want me to tell you how to use your commas and semi-colons, just ask in your next review and I'll be happy to help! I love grammar...so it'd be no problem for me. "She's a cow!" Creed cried, dismayed. "How did a cow get down there?"A bemused 'moo' wafted from the dark shaft. That's my favorite part! Keep writing and I'll keep reviewing! I like this story a lot! --bOOKface31--
bookface31 2006-09-11 ch 1,	I really like this story, and I like where it is going. Hopefully you think the same way of mine.I like the insults exchanged; they're very witty and clever. I will have to wait to critque you, because I think I want to get to know your story more before I say anything negative. --bOOkface31--
twilight-x 2006-09-10 ch 1,	I've only had a chance to read the first chapter of this story, but I'll probably read the second one when I have time. It seems complicated but in an interesting way. I really like your way with words, especially your chapter titles. They are so poetic ! Keep up the good work ! =)
ClassicTrick 2006-09-07 ch 2,	You should make a story just about these three brothers, I think they are funny as hell. I think the whole scene in the well was hilarious. "Moo...". Ah gotta love cows man, gotta love cows.
Kon Savage 2006-09-04 ch 1,	Wow that's a lot of dialouge, actually I'm jelous, I find it difficult to keep up a (almost constant) dialougue for so long without it getting kind of...silly. So props on that. The chapter really did establish the conflict between Raevin and Naeth without divulging to much of the reasons behind it, something that will get me back here for more. I realize that this is a dialougue driven piece but a little more description of the surroundings may help advance the mood. Lastly I thought it was funny that Lady Mikaela just popped out of the woods, this makes it sound like this could be a recurring gag where Naeth isn't doing anything and the Lady just pops out of random places (refrigerator, ketchup bottle, etc.) always getting Naeth beaten up by Raevin, but if that isn't the case you may want Lady Mikaela to explain what she was doing unescorted in the woods. I also hate writing about my own stories in a review but since you don't have an email...thanks for the revision (I tried my best) so I'm happy with one easily corrected mistake. As for the time period, I want this to be sort of an alternate world where cars can coexist with knights(Kinda like how Dragonball Z had dinosaurs and hovercars (though I'm not a huge fan) but that is what I was going for) but I'll make a point to address the universe soon. Thanks. Kon Savage
ClassicTrick 2006-08-28 ch 1,	hahaha I like thisYes, madness! The torture and isolation quickly lead to a weakened heart and mind. The spirit soon begins to wilt as does a weed in winter..." "...a weed?" "For lack of a better metaphor, I say weed!" Raevin replied icily. "It was such an inspiring beginning of what could have been a rather impressive monologue." "What's wrong with the weed?" "Hm? Oh, nothing at all..." ^the best partI'm looking forward to reading the rest! Also I tried to work in your advice for the next chapter that I'm writing. It'll be posted in the next day or so.Thanks for the advice!Update soon!~CT

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