Beautiful and tragic.
It makes me want to pull at my hair and scream,
its just wonderful like that.

I sincerly love it.

the first line is so enticing. great job.

Awsome (yet again).

Oh, btw, my review to "My Next Heartache" I swear I mean I hated the feeling I expierience, not your poem. I'm sorry it came out wrong! (Delete if you wish, I can re-word it)

i love the way you begin this, the image is astounding and you just... wow, you write it so well. . . . and the ending is sad. but this was well written, nice job.

Gorgeous imagery at the start-technicolor/explosives. Simply gorgeous, and original.

Lovely.

♥ Alice

I love those first two lines. Best of the poem. Such imagery. The footsteps pacing out of service are also a nice touch. Cool poem. Keep writing! :)

oh my God... i'm speechless. this is just so fantastic and beautiful. well written, amazing. dazzling. God... this poem is so brilliant. i truly love it. the end is just perfect!

"dawn bleeds in technicolor/explosives"

i love the sheer comparison of those two. it's great because it's not cliche. the whole piece is well rounded, good format. & i can relate.

I love it. Very climatic. It builds up and builds up... And the word, "Oblivion" like it's her name or something. I absolutely love it. Just gorgeous. It's sad, though. My favorite lines were, "you could tell from the shaking on the telephone that night/-&- the static as her footsteps paced out of service." Like she's just walking away with the phone in her hand and it's dropping out and the person on the line is trying to talk, trying to hear her but she's literally walking out of the conversation. Love the imagery. Wow. Bravo.

Very good. I absolutely ADORE your word choice, but it could do without the very last line.