God, I am so sorry that I have not read anything for so long, I just got really wrapped up in school! I LOVED this chapter! So good, especially about the whole Haven/Adam thing going on. I really want to know what happens. Some of your phrases are a little confuzzling because of typos, but that is not a big problem, I just am really good at spotting them. Keep updating now or I will have to hunt you down and make you write! JK! :) You rock, and you would even more if you would update right now!

Ok, well I can be a tough critic sometimes but I just want you to know that this story is great. There are a lot of grammatical errors, mostly little things like when you talked about Hayln crying you finished a sentence with " but even so we all cry and at sometime." Now, i could just not really understand what you are saying, but that is just my opinion. "You have every to be scared" I think in this sentence you meant to say You have every right to be scared. I sometimes write so fast that I forget words, it just tends to confuse the reader. Another thing I had a hard time with is that your commas I don't think are used correctly. I have a huge problem with that in my writing as well. I really liked the plot of this story, and I am just about to read the rest of them. You have such a great writing style and I can't wait to see your other ideas. You did a great job on this story, but I would love love love love love love LOVE it if you continued on with it! Thanks for such an enjoyable read and a reveiw as well! Great job and good luck!

Personally I thought this chapter was a little slow up until the stranger showing up, but it's just the beginning so I don't blame you. The man showing up really caught my attention, I'd like to see what happens next.