Interesting chapter. Both Silus and Ice seem like complicated characters in their own ways. I look forward to seeing how this turns out.

Shadowhound

exicting chapter and nice action scenes. but it got a bit difficult to read with such short sentences, longer paragraphs might help. just a suggestion.

Question about your vampires, does them being turned affect their personality? It seems that is the case, but I want to be sure. If so, why? Joss Whedon explained that his vampires lost ther souls when they died and were reborn without them as well as their consciousness. They were still the same people, just "free."

Overall, good chapter. I hope to see more soon.

Shadowhound

Interesting chapter. I wonder who Sid is and what his reason for following Grace around is, aside from the whole Pillar thing. When you have Grace meet the druids, try to go a little more indepth about what a Pillar is. It helps reinforce it in the minds of the readers. Right now I draw a lot of parallels between the Pillar and the Slayer. I'm not sure if that was what you were going for.

Shadowhound

Nice chapter. I liked the descriptions used for the fight scene. Overall, good chapter. I hope to read more soon.

Shadowhound

Okay, a bit more history into your world. Question, I'm going to assume this takes place in the modern world because you haven't said anything to the contrary, if there are vampyres, werewolves, demons, and all that crowd, how many people are aware of them? Do the bad guys walk around without fear, or is it an Underworld type thing were they operate in secrecy?

Anyway, good chapter. I look forward to the next.

Shadowhound

Interesting beginning. I like how you rush into the story without giving the reader a chance to breath. My one complaint is that some of the dialogue doesn't seem fluid and natural. “You’ve tried before, Violet. Now try again!” is an example. Just try to iron out the wrinkles to smooth it out some more. On to the next chapter.

Shadowhound

MORE MORE MORE MORE! Must have MORE!!

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This looks really good so far! You left it off at a nice suspense point, which has me wanting to read more. I noticed a few grammar errors here and there, but I was into the story so it didn't bother me. xD Looking forward to more!