Well, it's a nice story.

[She stuck her tongue out at him.]

How cute, haha.

What sometimes bother me is Kassix's internal monologue. I think it looks nicer and more obvious if you put them in italic fonts.

However, nice way of linking the story to Phoenix, it's a smart way to do so anyway. Haha.

The dialogs are well-done too, enjoy reading them.

I think that's all for my review.

Happy writing anyway.

og wow such great descriptions and wonderful ideas! really liked it. would like to read more of these characters! keep it up, fran ~*~

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I like it a LOT. The dialogue and dialect was very nice. I think this could function very well as a longer story...I love the characters, and I'd love to read more about them. I was especially impressed how real you made the magic and fantasy elements; it really adds to the realism. Kudos to you!

that was pretty intense. I really like your style, you are an amazing writer.

*sighs dreamily* Wow. I can't get that imagery out of my head. "...morphing the air behind the two into a bird woven of flames..." You've really outdone yourself.