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| Violet Marx 2006-11-25 ch 1,  | abuseI love this one! My favorite part is definitely '(starfish) soul'. |
| laughter at the funeral 2006-10-19 ch 1, | abusewow...there is such a great imagery in here...especially the "water baby" and the "mermaid scales"...they sound really catchy and hyphaluting(?)... truly yours... |
| fairytale failure 2006-09-27 ch 1, | abuseOoh, I especially like where you turn waves of hair into water waves.About your review...it was a figurative death. :P |
| Aetha Daemon 2006-09-06 ch 1, | abuseI won't be like those people who give short reviews. I won't! Here is something with some meat to it: I like the presentation of the poem, overall, because the visual aesthetics blend so well with the subject of the poem.. Bright, sunny... because of the uneven spacing, the random, yet not random, parentheses and line skips. The italics and font-funnies also help! I also liked how you only capitalized one word-God- showing that this was an important subject. It stood out, which drew the eye towards the end of the poem. It felt very medeterranian... The words that you chose completed the aesthicity of it, because they all jumped out. They all held meaning, and provided a visual. I especially like "cerulean", "water baby", and "scales" because they just give me a little shiver. I'm weird like that. But the fact that you wrote this with such a fun tone, and managed to add depth to it, is pretty cool. And the way that you add depth--you add a stanza about the somewhat mystical qualities of the tides, in parentheses as if you were whispering a secret to the wind... I loved this. If you want plain and simple. It was really very good. ~Aetha |
| boys kiss girls 2006-08-28 ch 1, | abuseYay for water babies! I love this one, I'm going to add it to my favorites if I have room. Seriously, I think it's the best one you've written in an extremely long time. =) |
| classic violet 2006-08-27 ch 1, | abuseJust absolutely gorgeous! I LOVE that first stanza to no end. Lovely poem. It sparkled, love it. |
| ode to a firefly 2006-08-27 ch 1, | abuseDo starfish have souls? =P ♥Christine |
| Aquafied 2006-08-26 ch 1, | abuse(sometimes blue as cerulean) -hm, that reminds me of something long ago |
| dress her up in fairytales 2006-08-26 ch 1, | abuse"and what a God he was/to decorate the sea/and sky with s t a r s" love it. |
| The Un-great-ful 2006-08-26 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting, you have an aqueous soul, you do. Pulse like the waves, my friend. Alan. |