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| audrey 2007-12-18 ch 20,  | Who! that was all friggin right guys, just substitute all that fake swearing for real, and you got it right, very, very right! cant wait to read the SECOND ONE! hugs and kisses Audrey |
| audrey 2007-12-18 ch 19, | sorry havent created that account yet, but whoops i just kept on reading without pausing I think i skipped a chapter or two, oh well, very very nice! almost done aye? And thats just not cool jon, killing your own son... |
| audrey 2007-12-17 ch 16, | WoW! uh not much to say that I havent said before...loverly chapter you got going, and I hope it keeps going... love audrey |
| Audrey 2007-12-17 ch 14, | Jon, you couldnt build a boat to save your life, you could barely cannoe while you where here, but still a very nice chapter! alone and Married...I dont think that it would creep you out that much...your a romantic remember? Love, Audrey |
| Audrey 2007-12-17 ch 13, | You would! that is great! very great! very nice! much love, audrey |
| Audrey 2007-12-14 ch 12, | WoW, Jon you never had and never will make things easy, but that was cool, the pace the plane hitting you always said that you wanted to go to that palce in time to try to save people. |
| audrey 2007-12-14 ch 11, | Me thinks that there getting shorter, but I still very much love the chapter. |
| Audrey 2007-12-14 ch 10, | You know I should be doing my home work but this is a damn good story, and Jon can you still not drive? oh and by the by, I'm going to be using your old email address to set up an account here. Don't worry I already know your password. You sure dont change much. much Love, Audrey |
| Audrey 2007-12-14 ch 9, | Nice! very nice dialoge, great change of pace and most definatly a great way to end it, are you guys going to write for a living? you should, that would be cool as hell to see all of your books on a display case in Barne's an Noble. |
| Audrey 2007-12-14 ch 7, | Another nice chapter you got going here, I like the way teh pace is picking up and most definatly my faviort character has to be Jon, not for any personal reasons, just I happen to love a badass... as always your friend, Audrey |
| Audrey 2007-12-13 ch 5, | Jon, your probably wondering who this is...and yes it is me, I've gotten better and I want to talk...Look I am sorry for all that I put you thru, well there's another good chapter, a very good job now, That Is totally something That you would do! and you wouldnt mind killing anybody that tried to kill you...we know that! |
| Author 2007-12-13 ch 4, | Another very nice chapter, The loss of Jon, Jon was always doing that in real life, martrying himself, sucks for all who try to save him, trust me I know, tell him if he's not monitering these that this is... Author aka Audery; |
| Author 2007-12-13 ch 3, | WOW! Very much the mystery, 'course everyone hates the native, but other than that a very good chapter indeed! although I think that I can see the differences in writers, might be that your having the characters help? I have a hunch that maybe just maybe, your the better mormon of the group and this is your idea and at least one is helping you, maybe Jon that sounds like something he would do... -Author |
| An Author 2007-12-13 ch 2, | Well, thats a very interseting beganing, and what do you know the native is the only one with the survival instinct to run like hell when the shooting starts, and then he faints, we'll just see how this goes, -Author |
| R.E.D. the animator 2007-12-10 ch 20,  | So I decided to read it again. I still can't belive that Jon waved to Kenzi right before she shot him. Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha HA HA HA HAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHA! |