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| Lady Neferankh 2006-09-16 ch 1,   | This is quite good!But just out of curiousity,are you planning to write any more about what happens to her later on? For a story told in a few short paragraphs though, I think you did a fairly good job of describing things, such as when you say : "They were happily married a week; unhappily married two years". This does a very good job of "summing things up" most people would probably just write in similar circumstances "the marriage was an unhappy one".Hope to see you write either more of this story or begin another one. |