GAH! Attack of the Evil Bunnies!
I always knew there was someting not right about those bubbly-eyed, fuzzy, floppy-eared fiends!!
En Gard! you fluffy sticky-uppy-eared monsters! I have proof!! No more will you ruin the lives of bunny-lovers, decieving them with your... well you STINK! Ya hear me?! Not only are ya EVIL, but ya stink like a skunk-sprayed toad left out in the sun to die! ... okay... maybe not that bad... But ya still STINK you lilly-livered Furballs!!

Phew! glad i got that out of my system!
anywoo- um, with your puncuation, you don't need to put a space between the end of a sentance and the full-stop. Or most grammatical stuff, aka, commas, question-marks, exclamation-marks, ect, ect.

Everything else is great. :) keep up the good work!!

Miz Calixte

Ps. I like rabbits- really I do! I just hate measly, fuzzly, over-fluffy, nightmarish, bubbly-eyed BUNNIES. ;)

Pps. I had a bunny named Killer once. She started out as Snowflake, but she earned her name by killing everything and any critter that lived around her. :'( She killed my widdle rabbit, Licorice.

Ps. Rabbits and BUNNIES are NOT the same... Bunnies are EVIL! Rabbits aren't! Kinda like cooking chocolate and Cadbury chocolate. :) get my point? Okay, I'll shutup now...

Do i get the award for the longest Review?? :D

Trist's a **. Hate her.

It took me a really long time to get to this, but I am glad that I did, I loved it. This story is really good. Even the little mistakes here and then barely registered because I loved it so much.

:D love your story.
So excited for the next part. :)

Ok, this is pretty awesome, I think you've definitely improved since the beginning of this story! There's not much to critique, I think the pace is good and the action is good, love the monkey/spider shifts, I was wondering where you got the inspiration for them from? There's only really one thing I can say was a mistake - the bat shift's eyes started off violet, then you changed them to amber. But other than that, a great read! Can't wait to read the concluding chapter...

Andy

There's definately a lot of action in this chapter. Actually, the part where Trist and Sage are running about in the basement of the old house reminds me of what could have been a dream sequence. I've got some pieces of stories written off of dreams. Amazing what the subconscious comes up with.

I think with as hard as Sage is grabbing Trist's wrist, she ought to be thinking, thank goodness for those pain killers.

The scene where she actually black out is good with the skip forward. I was put out to have my wisdom teeth cut out, and it was the weirdest thing. One moment it was one in the afternoon and I was in the oral surgeon's chair, and the next it was 5 and I was somewhere else . . . can't remember where I woke up, but I do remember it was really weird to have lost that time with no conscious thought of sleep.

Although it is inconvenient, I think Trist has recovered from her head trauma a bit fast. I don't know a lot about such ailments, but the thug did hit her pretty hard, and she seems to have snapped out of it pretty quick for the end of this chapter.

Another thing, I would change the bit about the thug being Hispanic. It is not an important thing for the story, and you might be accused of stereo-typing. He is not a very important character, a big, gruff man would do. Otherwise, the addition of this trouble was a nice touch.

A nice cliffy as well. Now, you've got every one wondering if Trist is dead or worse, and what about poor Sage?

Well, I am back for more, I guess.

It has been a long time, and I am glad you gave an update to things. Davies is indeed a mean one, and it seems like Tristin is always getting her throat in between someone's hands.

Just a curious little thought. If the shifts are impervious to bullets, why would Davies need to run away. Couldn't he just change forms, finish his job on Tris, then eat a few cops without worry? Am I a pain or what?

Finally managed to find time to read this chapter. waiting for the next one! :)

Well, this is better. The action is certainly picking up, the blood is good. But I think you need to work on character names...Sage, Gordon and Davies are a little mundane. Plus I think for online stories shorter chapters are better, as many people don't like reading too much on a screen. Well, I look forward to this story's end!

again? oh no!! tha't can't be good!! aw poor good sage! who's going to save her!!

::Gasp:: What a shocker ! Well not really , kinda figured it was coming , well at least the bit about Gordon .
Some weird square things popped up towards the end of the chapter... should fix that . Tons of questions after reading this chapter and also tons of them answered ...sort of . Over all nice chapter and good luck with all the wedding stuff ,can't wait for the next chapter !

it was good... i liked it better...well bye and post!

Hmm interesting plot so far, really. The only thing i thought was weird was how everyone seems to be trying to convince Trist that she has some sort of crush over Sage, which seems to rush the story. Just because he's handsome they think she likes him? and every small thing she does to hint that she likes Sage makes them smile and stuff. You know what i'm saying? Anyway, I kinda liked it so far. I'm not one into much romance stories, especially frog-related ones, but I think its turning out nicely.

O what illegal scream is Chris plotting? *_* Ha, that smiley looks like it's been hypnotized!
I an SOO angry that Chris beleaives a stranger over his sister, but I understand why and all that. This chapter was intresting and I loved it--much like all your other chapters^_^

This chapted ended nicely^_^
I can't wait to see what they have cooked up *evil grin*