This was awesome! I loved the story you told with poetry. I wish I was that talented!

Historical poem. I like the title. Good job!

Twilight Starr

Nice work, overall. I couldn’t help but notice, though, that the first two lines do not rhyme. While they both end with ‘-ing’ that does not make them rhyme. For example, ‘screaming’ rhymes with ‘teeming’ but not ‘breaking.’ If you tweaked the wording in those lines to make the entire poem rhyme, I think it would be improved as a whole. Keep writing!