Hmm. This is a poem that certainly expresses many young writer's state of mind, my own included. But bravo, very nice metaphors.

Heatless

I want to be happy.

Please make me happy.

My fantasies,

Aren’t real.

thats great, its my favirtie part, i like how u used repetion, nice

this is really goodvery like wat you have done with donex

so... this had a nice rhythm, but it wasn't my favorite (sry)... you advertised me... thank you... ) appreciate it. later gal.

-Phoenix