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| poison-hearts-xo 2008-05-10 ch 1,  | abuseThe idea of suicide without fear seems unreal to me. It just seems a little mechanical, aside from the rejuvination experienced by the character just before her death. |
| Exodus.Escence Of Sin 2007-08-16 ch 1, | abusei think this was a great poem overall but i noticed that you didnt get to the point quite that well. i love the vision and the feeling i got from this poem just try to get the point across without making it seem like your really trying. do you get what im saying? im not trying to be mean though lol. you seem like a wonderful writter as do you reviews prove to be so. ^.^ just thought that id drop by some hints is all. ttyl lost.in.a.lullaby |
| Markus Ripley 2007-07-15 ch 1, | abuseWow, great work, very nice flow, good voice. Keep up the great work. ripley |
| CaFFy 2007-01-01 ch 1, | abuseIt's not bad but then again I've never been crazy for poems. lol. I'm planning to write a story with the events leading to girl's suicide and her suicide notes. Please read it when I actually write it. lol. One question though. What made you open my story even when there wasnt even a description? |
| Unforgettably-Uniquely Me 2006-11-09 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is very descriptive. I love your choice of words for this piece, it's very good. "Death standing next to you" Though it wasnt physically visual, I could still see the words and the scene play out. Again, I really like this. |
| awannabewriter 2006-08-29 ch 1, | abuseI can't believe people fantasize and write about suicide so much... It just sounds so hopeless. But I guess its supposed to. |
| Padimate 2006-08-28 ch 1, | abuseThe poem itself is ok. The subject of suicide, though, has been presented many times over and over in similar ways like this. I'd have to say, try looking at suicide a little differently. Matter of fact, look at all common topics like this in as many perspectives as you can until you find you know exactly how to present it. It's a good, clean poem. It's missing something. Something that shows that it's your own work instead of an echo from the long halls of poetic suicide. You have potential, keep it going! |