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| David Turner 2006-08-29 ch 1,  | abuseThis was an excelent story! It flowed very well and kept the readers attention the entire time. The atmosphere was definitely set, I completely felt the suspense of the soldier as the girl approached. I had some questions and suggestions but by the end the author tied up everything I was thinking while reading. There were a few typos, but other than that this was an amazing short story! |
| Mephistophelian 2006-08-29 ch 1, | abusewow...very creepy. A lot of people seem to have trouble writing action, but from what I read here, you aren't one of them! I'm very intrested to see what becomes of Mr. Preston. please update soon! -Mephistophelian |