Hey there, interesting story. But i feel as though the relatioship is going alittle too fast. for one these two haven't met. and kait seems that she wouldnt really jump into somethign like that. Griever i think wouldn't feel love that quick, and that emotional for his he is suppose to be a one of the strongest worriors of the family right?
I believe some editing is needed.
But in all it seems to have a good plot, but the dialog seems to get me confused, like it is scattered everywhere.
Update soon.
Thank You!

Ja-Ne =^_^=

This is awesome! Mick is a jerk...>:( He is no gentleman.I like this story, there's just a few things I might tweak about it if I was writing it. Remember this is just me:* I might make it so she had another form, like, a complete human form, not one w/ a tail and ears... well... human ears I mean.* I would make her mother a bit more over the top, like totally abusing the posistion her daughter is in. Or is she not that kind of character?That's pretty much it. If you have time could you check out my story 'Spider Webbing'?Thanks! Update soon!-Lemon Glass