this is by far my favourite chapter of all time. It was like reading a book! I'd love to copy down some of my favourite lines from this but I'd just end up copying the whole chapter. lol.

the way you described the fountain, and then the realization was brilliant. how truth isn't always 'actuality'. the first paragraph was beautiful, too. then when it all came together at the end, and Yumi disapeared, I got chills. lol.

brillinat work. just brilliant. now I can't wait till it makes more sense in chapter 5! lol.

a work this good shouldn't be explained anyway. i'd rather always be curious, but that's just me =] amazing. hmph! ulterior motives...

oh wow, this story is progressing so well! I love it ^^ poor Yumi, it must really be hard for her. I rather enjoyed the way you portaryed the conversation in this chapter. It felt very real.

till chapter four!

-noihseret

aw, I like Yumi. your main character is great too. I love his personality. the style you write with is wonderful. like something out of a book.

sorry for taking so long to review this. I have been so busy lately.

on to chapter three!

i kind of felt like i was sitting right next to him and receiving the news with him. it was strange - but a good kind of strange. i could see all of it so clearly. amazing.

meilin

i'm not...very fond of this format *twitch* but i think...from what i've read that it's progressing nicely. Was the first chapter a prologue or a REAL chapter? Hm...it's very vague? But maybe you're just starting up the story so that's why...It's very poetic in it's own way so I think you should...try for a more "reading" tone? More adjectives, adverbs, paragraphs...the works? yeah. okay. ciao =]

Wow. Time passes. It amazes me how you I and most of my other writing buds from this site have really grown. Really. I don't feel like I'm reading some struggling students work- you know your shit, pardon my english. I really did enjoy this chapter. I was WAITING for you to do something new and it's ABOUT TIME! Lol. No, honestly- this sounds ready for print now. You know how to make those words flow so easily... well I guess he does as well... don't forget about me!
-Yin, AngelX3, MaboroshiNoMiko, or whatever you know me as...

"When it comes to weather… nothing pains more than the biting cold. It begs you to ask yourself, the what ifs of life – the last and dire thought before your mind falls into the pit of contemplation – lost in the pit of oblivion. Most writers love this moment – it’s like looming over a cliff ready to jump yet holding on to everything dear – desperately wishing the mind of imagination could come up with something more fruitful, more beautiful, and more descriptive of reality than the previous venture."

I absolutely love that. Very true... for me at least. I'm very intrigued as to where this is going, although i already have a vague idea. Yumi is a very interesting character, being mute and all, even though we're given a very short glimpse of her. Just enough, i think, to pique the interest of readers. I can't wait to see what happens and expect me to bug you to death about it next time we talk. =) (Sorry for the late review, finals are extremely annoying. But as promised...Oh and feel honored, you're the first person i reviewed. haha)

geez those people never give him a break, i wonder how the rest will unfold for him in his siutation. i apologize for the long delay of my review, things don't stop coming. but i really think, in all the reading of your wor, you become more of yourself in your writing and improving every time. i really enjoy your pieces and i hope to hear from you again as well, i would love for advice from a writer of your reputation and style. have a nice weekend.
-draculas soprano

the end made me smile and i like yumi already. but your main character is hilarious. i love his outlook and view on everything and i'm going to enjoy reading more about him. again, one of the best authors i've come across - both published and not. can't wait to read more.

meilin

Sugoi desuyo~. Haha, I loved the PDA scene!! *ahem* I think this chapter played out realy well, I can practically see the panels in my head, except the artwork in my head looks a bit too shojo. Back to point, it's driving me crazy how I can't keep reading so you should update soon so I don't tear all my hair out =)

Until next time~

hiro! (x
i haven't reviewed one of your stories in a while.
or talked to you either. -stalks you on lj-

anyways this one is really nice
though i find it insulting that you assume the readers beliefs how you did. not really though.
is that philosphy yours? or did you just make it up? it's very modern (is that the right word?).
you're prose is amazing, as it always is.
and the main character is incredibly cute
okay i'm going to read the next chapter now.

Great story. I like the realistic feel to it. The scenes in my head were playing out superbly. It's a really good story, hope you write more of it.

Beautifully poignant, brutally honest and very heart-rending.

Is this a true story? Or at least creative nonfiction (embellished narrative based on real life experiences)? Because it feels so real and powerful.

Always waiting for the next...

It seems so effortless what you do with words. I'm looking forward to the next installment, and wishing you the best of luck for the upcoming school year.-Cindy Moon *)