O.o
very good.
very sad.
but very good.

an excellent poem! I loved it! it really flowed. mucho propos

An excellent poem, nice to have you back! I love the repetition, it works so well here. I look forward to reading more of your future work.

- Pricilla Grey

I really love the second stanza of the chorus. It's so catchy, especially the line "if my mind was more than fleece." Plus you've written a song here that uses metaphors and isn't completely literal. Great work. Keep writing! :)