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Reviews For: One Shot No 5: Tough Luck

N. White
2007-08-23
ch 1,
abuseToo bad for Pete..I like the way you mix his thoughts in with the dialogue, it's way a way more interesting way to show he's nervous than just saying "Pete was nervous".
Kelina and Liliana
2007-03-21
ch 1,
abuseNow that luck is total crap. poor mime
grafiti rtk
2006-12-29
ch 1,
abuseThat was weird, to say the least. Lol. Loved it! So random...
Complications
2006-12-15
ch 1,
abuseSome of the dialog was confusing, but not major. It’s ironic, and dark, I wouldn't go so far as saying its dark humor. It isn't bad. I think it's just wrongly categorized.
Gata De La Noche
2006-12-03
ch 1,
abuseThis is silly. But the cynical side of me loves it. Awesome. I love the deviation from the expected to the completely random. ery awesome. And guys are silly...
criti-sized
2006-09-17
ch 1,
abuseWow, that was a bit of a surprise. For her to say yes, then get killed by a stone. This one had me laughing alot at the irony of it.
Crazy Talk
2006-08-31
ch 1,
abuseGuys don't REALLY stress that hard, do they? Nah. They couldn't possibly. If they did, I might have to take pity on Will. But everybody knows that confidence grows on trees. you just have to smart enough to climb the right one...
inktube
2006-08-30
ch 1, anon.
abuselol...this is the best one...
The Un-great-ful
2006-08-30
ch 1,
abuseThat was a bit ** up.

Keep writing,

Alan.
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