Oh my goodness...that was so terrible! I really enjoyed it because it was awesome, but that was...such a bad thing for Peter to think right after she died. Oh my goodness. Terrible referring to Peter's thought, fyi. I was so NOT dissing your work, because this was awesome.

Great job!

LOL, haha, that's funny. I feel bad for Pete, though, is he ever gonna get a girl? Atleast he's cute.

Great story-I mean, one-shot, hehe.

Too bad for Pete..I like the way you mix his thoughts in with the dialogue, it's way a way more interesting way to show he's nervous than just saying "Pete was nervous".

Now that luck is total crap. poor mime

That was weird, to say the least. Lol. Loved it! So random...

Some of the dialog was confusing, but not major. It’s ironic, and dark, I wouldn't go so far as saying its dark humor. It isn't bad. I think it's just wrongly categorized.

This is silly. But the cynical side of me loves it. Awesome. I love the deviation from the expected to the completely random. ery awesome. And guys are silly...

Wow, that was a bit of a surprise. For her to say yes, then get killed by a stone. This one had me laughing alot at the irony of it.

Guys don't REALLY stress that hard, do they? Nah. They couldn't possibly. If they did, I might have to take pity on Will. But everybody knows that confidence grows on trees. you just have to smart enough to climb the right one...

lol...this is the best one...

That was a bit fucked up.

Keep writing,

Alan.