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| Crepusculum 2007-03-03 ch 13,  | abuseGood. I like the picture it paints. Also, usually people look into the setting sun, and not away from it, and this adds a touch of novelty to the situation, and makes me wonder what deeper meaning might be behind this. :) |
| Kicking Poe 2007-02-06 ch 4, | abuseromantic and light and airy. nice work, my favorite of the collection so far. |
| greenGalilee 2007-02-05 ch 13, | abuseBeautiful imagery. |
| Samana 2007-02-04 ch 11, | abusewow. this is one of my favorites out of this collection. great choice of words. peace |
| Samana 2007-02-04 ch 13, | abusegood as always. i find that haikus become more poetic when you loosen the boundries around them a little. try that out some. this ones is good though. keep it up |
| Thenardier 2006-12-19 ch 12, | abuseOnce again, you do not disappoint. "My mind and my soul Align and I know the sea Has stolen my heart." Fascinating. And impactful and beautiful way to end. |
| Lynaeve 2006-12-19 ch 12, | abuseThis is a wonderful collection of haikus. My favorites are "Nautical Star", "Cannon Fight" and "Alaska". Great job. |
| Crepusculum 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abuseAll the twelve you have so far were very beautiful, and I like how the poems explore different themes, and different feelings, although they are all nautical. My favourite, however, is still this very first one - it's short and simple, but it says so much, and describes something familiar to everybody. :) |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abuseSo pretty. Simple, but simplicity sometimes says the most. And an interesting image, too. Keep writing! :) |
| Ryan Schiff 2006-11-15 ch 5, | abuseAs a fellow Haiku writer, I know how tough it can be to get them to string together (I've done two cycles of three each, but put them separate when uploading them, because they can and should stand alone). Of all the haiku in this "cycle" shall we say, this one stands out. The final line, inserting a voice into this otherwise silent story strikes a sudden sundering break from the psudo-romantic action taking place. |
| Midnight Star Lights 2006-11-15 ch 1, | abuseAwe.. this is to me is very sweet... I love it too much! |
| Kavita Najim 2006-11-13 ch 11, | abuseI love the last stanza, it is so full of hope and longing. Thanks for the review. Peace, Jessi |
| Oceanjewel 2006-11-13 ch 3, | abusethis is stunning. one of the best haikus ive read on here. well done!! The last line brings it together perfectly. Thanks a lot for your review of the watering hole...just to let you know I'm re posting because it has a spelling mistake and theres a minor change I want to make. So if you see it on my page without your review just know your review has been read and appreciated :). also tell me what you think of the new one if you have the time 2 pop by! anyway... keep writing!x |
| teh tarik 2006-11-10 ch 9, | abuselovely images. |
| teh tarik 2006-11-10 ch 11, | abuse*under dark Alaskan skies* that was just the most beautiful line of this whole piece. and the repeated references of Charon. gorgeous - |