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Queen Maab 2007-01-17 ch 3, anon.	abuseI have to keep remembering to breathe because of the complete awesomness of this story. Fnatastic researched effort which is fun exciting and realistic It is 1:00 at night and in my insomniac-icle craziness i wandered across this story. My eyes are swimming and i desperetly need to pee but your story is so addicting that i have to keep reading. Being especially enamored to stories of this kind. Especially the gods of old in a modern context.Meddeling Bastards! You are RockisIncranatis and if you know me which pity for you you don't that is the ULTIMATE COMPLIMENT. So Now i think my bladder is about to explode and I must leave to reead the rest of your story at a later date. Queen Maab
you'll see 2007-01-08 ch 3,	abuseI like it, it's interesting how different Jagat seems from his view versus Kalpana's.
innominate noun 2006-11-12 ch 3,	abuseI'm really excited about this story. It seems very well-researched and is very well-written. I just have a few complaints/suggestions/constructive criticisms - whatever you want to call them. My first is from chapter 1 (I don't mean the prelude), in the kind-of beginning. I'll quote: "And finally, he thought with the dry taste of irony, they would both be free. The script was perfect and just the same as it had been last week when he had set out with the same intent. And the week before that. Jagat wasn’t entirely sure what doubts had crept into his mind when he wasn’t looking." This was rather confusing. You suddenly introduce Jagat by telling us his name, and it's so abrupt that a reader (cough me cough) can't quite tell whether it's a new person in another point of view or what. I have only one other constructive criticism, about Kalpana. My issue is as follows: Mary Sue. I'm sure that Kalpana gets a lot of characterization later on, but right now all I am seeing is one of the Mary Sue archetypes: Powerful!Dark!ImportantMission!DarkPast!Killer/Assassin!Sue. Not that characters like that don't make interesting stories many times, and yours definitely has the potential to be one of them. But you need to make a reader (cough me cough) more invested in Kalpana earlier on. Make her a real-er character; maybe in her fight with Jagat have her lose a little more quickly. (I have to say, though, having her be confused that time when Jagat and Hastin were talking was quite a nice touch. Total Mary Sues are never confused.) Anyway, I'm really happy that I started to read this. I'm looking forward to updates! Here I am, bouncing in my seat. I want to read more! Grin! -Bookerpiller
Bloodflower 2006-10-22 ch 1,	abuseYAY! Hindu gods! ...yes, I'm Indian and as far as my Hinduism is concerned you've got these crazies down pretty well. (I would say I'm well within my rights to call them crazy...they're all a little odd...do funny things to us mortals...) I will keep reading!
VendettaTheory 2006-08-31 ch 1,	abuseAh, Eastern mythology, very interesting... I enjoyed the first few chapters very much, the prelude in paticular felt straight out of a book of myths. The assassin archtype is kind of overdone and cliched but writer's have pulled it of creativly before. Flaw all your characters (yes, even the God's, strange as that sounds) as well as you did with the farmer. Jagat especially seems to good to be true to me. 'It was a surprise he was not the God of Ugly, the God of Nightmares, the God of Eew, the God of Injury to Vision. Come to think of it, Jagat was not sure what Vivek was god of, so it was equally likely that he was god of exactly how painfully he appeared.' Heh! Very funny writing, good job. Your description and dialouge is very well written, VERY well written. Professional even, I commend you on that. You have real talent at crafting the story to feel 'mythlike', More than I can say for myself. Also, it was remarkably free of errors, always nice to see. Perhaps a glossary of terms most aren't familiar with? This is really good so far, I look forward to the next update, I'll be reading.

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