Simple and effective. I wish her the best with her assignment. Certainly would be neat to hear those lyrics performed by a choir! =)

I love the repetition of a word in the middle two lines of each stanza, it's different from any other sort of format I've seen on FP yet. It's such a sad, wistful ending, but I like it.

Beautiful imagery in the last stanza. Stunning portrait of love and wishful thinking. The word choice is primarily good, but not very interesting, sort of bland. Nice repetition with golden in the 3rd stanza. Nice work!

Ouch. How completely tragic, and the worse for how many times it's happened.

Beautiful!

So sweet but sad at the same time. I loved the repetition. It was 'subtle' and cleverly-done, I thought, but still strong enough to add to the poem. I love the imagery of the sea.

Wonderful work.

Aw, but shortcuts are more fun!

That was an entertaining read. Nicely done!

Good way to bring back memories of Elementery years. I sure miss making these turkeys.

Out of the collection this is my favorite, but I'm a sucker for sweet tragedies. It is a classic tale yet not clichéd here. So all in all, lovely.

I like this! I also regret she had such a small part toward the end. It could not have been easy at all, staying there that last year.

Though-provoking read, for me anyway.

I know little to nothing about American history, but this, too, was awesome nevertheless. Great use of a dialect, and plus, it rhymed. And, I learned something about American history in the process. Hurrah!

~Cristina

PS: Sorry about the sucky reviews. I wish I had more to say but my brain does not speak English now...

Even though you used a cinquain perfectly, I would love to see what you could do with the idea in a freeverse form.

I didn't leave a review on the last chapter (or poem, in this case), but I loved that one. It was an interesting idea, and well-written, which we all know is horrendously rare on this site. *offers cake*

~Cristina

This poem made me miss the ocean. One hour is much too far away to live from it. Good job!

ah i read that book, and the poem the the book derived from. i think the poem was much better than the book to be quite honest. this one is extremely similar to the poem, which makes me hesitate a lil bit to say good job. It's well written but as i said its strikingly similar.

wow this is really great, and i love the history involved in it. I bet you got a great grade for your class. your talented and i like how you used language that people back then prolly used (i wouldnt know)

very different from what i expected love the line "Nine long months -- time to live; time to die." great job with this.