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| Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-20 ch 1,  | abuseBeautiful! So sweet but sad at the same time. I loved the repetition. It was 'subtle' and cleverly-done, I thought, but still strong enough to add to the poem. I love the imagery of the sea. Wonderful work. |
| Joelle Duran 2007-10-09 ch 10, | abuseAw, but shortcuts are more fun! That was an entertaining read. Nicely done! |
| WinterKitten 2007-10-01 ch 4, | abuseGood way to bring back memories of Elementery years. I sure miss making these turkeys. |
| sincerely disregard 2007-09-16 ch 1, | abuseOut of the collection this is my favorite, but I'm a sucker for sweet tragedies. It is a classic tale yet not clichéd here. So all in all, lovely. |
| Joelle Duran 2007-08-24 ch 9, | abuseI like this! I also regret she had such a small part toward the end. It could not have been easy at all, staying there that last year. Though-provoking read, for me anyway. |
| sin olvido 2007-05-08 ch 3, | abuseI know little to nothing about American history, but this, too, was awesome nevertheless. Great use of a dialect, and plus, it rhymed. And, I learned something about American history in the process. Hurrah! ~Cristina PS: Sorry about the sucky reviews. I wish I had more to say but my brain does not speak English now... |
| sin olvido 2007-05-08 ch 2, | abuseEven though you used a cinquain perfectly, I would love to see what you could do with the idea in a freeverse form. I didn't leave a review on the last chapter (or poem, in this case), but I loved that one. It was an interesting idea, and well-written, which we all know is horrendously rare on this site. *offers cake* ~Cristina |
| ohthevoices 2007-02-17 ch 1, | abuseThis poem made me miss the ocean. One hour is much too far away to live from it. Good job! |
| Dani P 2007-01-25 ch 5, | abuseah i read that book, and the poem the the book derived from. i think the poem was much better than the book to be quite honest. this one is extremely similar to the poem, which makes me hesitate a lil bit to say good job. It's well written but as i said its strikingly similar. |
| Dani P 2007-01-25 ch 3, | abusewow this is really great, and i love the history involved in it. I bet you got a great grade for your class. your talented and i like how you used language that people back then prolly used (i wouldnt know) |
| Dani P 2007-01-25 ch 1, | abusevery different from what i expected love the line "Nine long months -- time to live; time to die." great job with this. |
| Joelle Duran 2006-11-28 ch 4, | abuseAh, that's so darling! And your word choice really makes it vivid in the imagination. Well done! |
| Sylvan Tears 2006-09-21 ch 1, anon. | abuse(Sorry--too lazy to log in right now! ^_^;;) I loved this. It was melancholy without being uber-angsty. Kudos for avoiding gratuitous angst! The simplicity of this created amazing imagery. Wonderful job! |
| Joelle Duran 2006-08-31 ch 1, | abuseI like the simplicity of this, in the rhyme and repetition. And the poignancy of the uncertainty of their waiting. My only quibble is that the meter of 'conceived just before he had sailed west' feels off, I realize striking the 'had' throws off the syllable count, but to me it flows better that way. Very nice! |