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| dreamforever101 2006-08-31 ch 1,  | abuseHaha! That was so funny at the end there! Really Good and NICELY written. There weren't any spelling mistakes and Grammer was good which made it nice to read :D The word choice was good too and sophisticated. I can't say that I have any real advice except that maybe you could try for smaller paragraphs? Cuz I found myself skimming some of the really descriptive/narrative paragraphs ( I blame the tiny print and the fact that its 2:00 in the morning!) Anyways...Great story! Luv it! plz review my story/poems back :) -Dreamforever101 |