i liked it...i liked how it was all scattered around. and in the small amount of words you were able to put so much emotion in.
i probably shouldn't have read it though, seeing a friend of mine just killed himself but im ok. great job. keep up the writing.
and i hope your day got better and wasn't completely sad.

this is so sad.. and depressing
i wish you didn't kill him
but.. i still loved it great job

All I could say is Oh My God. And I don't mean that in a bad way at all. From the beginning to the end my eyes were glued to the moniter reading every word written and cherishing it. I literally felt the heartache and I'm glad you wrote it. It was beautiful and I hope you write other stories like these. You have a beauty with words.

Oh my god! How tragic... I love this. There is some fantastic stuff in here. "... an even breath in his beautiful wake" is a wonderful line. Your style has improved since some of your past work! I'm proud of you bb.

xoxo,The Astronaut

Aww that was sad. Good job with it though.

Aw :( That's sad... You meanie.

I hope today was a happy day...and that whatever made the day you write this a sad day is better.

But I really liked this... Short but with a lot of emotion.

xo

wow, great one shot. Loved it. Gave me chills. I like the way you wrote it too...kind of choppy and scatered. I dunno if you ment to do it that way, but it is very cool.

very touching and very sad

=O

Gah. That really was sad. I shouldn't have read it seeing as I was depressed already.. =( !!