Reviews for A Tale of Krith: The Hunter and the Hunted

Reviews For: A Tale of Krith: The Hunter and the Hunted

Alteng 2007-12-21 ch 1,	abuseAgain a very good story. I am not too sure about the ending. I think I would have ended it after the party found Xachek, but that is me. This seems to open up to a bigger story. I do like how you are so easily able to blend such an alien character into words and understanding. I would like to know more about the body changing thing, but that can wait for another story, but that was a different little line. An amusing litle thought for you. This is a second story that I have read by you, and you are like me in that you really do not deal with human characters. I had a complaint about Bane of Rendsberg in that concerns. Also I like that your characters are not those gorgeous, prissy fairy folk. These stories seem more like a science fiction than a fantasy stor, but that is cool as well.
Keira Kentai 2006-10-23 ch 1,	abuseHey man, how's it going? Gotta say, I love the story. You are a true author and I wish I had half of your talent. I will gladly listen to your review and take up on it. I'll be making corrections whenever the authors notice them since I have no time to write chapters except in the dead of night and by that time, I'm exhausted. Thank you once more and I'm personally glad that someone like you was kind enough to point out these problems and tell me how to fix them. Again, an excellent story! ~Last Guardian
John Michael Christopher 2006-09-21 ch 1,	abuseInteresting. The motif and the hunters in this story and the last one remind me of the aliens in the Predator movies. Anyway, the people are very strange, more bizarre so far than the world they live in. The characters in The Great Kithanu were so alien, I became interested in their world. I think The Hunter and the Hunted does less with character and reveals only that the world's got ice. You write action very well. I think your world building could be fantastic, too.
Maractor 2006-09-07 ch 1,	abuseG'day G'day with all the helpful reviews you have given me i feel obliged to do the same. This is an interesting story you have got here, it had me guessing as to what the main character actually was especially when it came to the desire about becoming a man again but you made it work in the end. This is a good story, very creative!
Elle Blaisure 2006-09-04 ch 1,	abuseI appreciate your criticism of my own work and you have given me some very good insights. So I'd thought that I might review one of your stories as well. This is a very interesting story. And has a lot of potential, but unfortunately it very hard to read. My initial compliant is that you use way too many adjectives and flowery descriptions. It's just too much. Your story does not flow and is a tad choppy. I also have a quick question. What is she? I was very confused, especially when this line came up: ‘Now, she wondered if she would live to see her next shakso taris, to be male again.’ I have no idea what this means. Is she some sort of elf? Like I said however, it is a good premise, and I did enjoy the concept. But there were a lot of obstacles between the beginning and end, and under normal circumstances I would have given up reading. But everything is editable, and we learn as we go. Good work. Laurel B.
Moonpaw3 2006-09-01 ch 1,	abuseoh, WOW. That is the best story, I daresay, that I've read in a long time.Okay, criticism time:I really like how, throughout the story, new facts come into play, and I think that you should keep doing that with your writing. It also was a good thing, I thought, that you didn't give away too much about the characters and where/when/how they live. Maybe that's something you could go into later on... I only really noticedc a couple of things, but they are really minor problems: (1) several times throughout the story, you repeated your words close together. (2) when she was in the cave, you mentioned her right arm being hurt, but then she was holding her left to her body. That caught me for a second, but it's only minor, like I said. That's all I have to say, although I do have one question... how do you say her name? 'Xachek'? 'zuh-check'?
Aine2009 2006-09-01 ch 1,	abusevery good i liked it. i did get a little confuzzled about the whole man thing. is it that she turns into oneor somthing?? i gots confused. anyways very good read. obty, thanks for reviewing my story, i appreciate the criticism!!

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