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| kelsi bones 2006-11-02 ch 1,  | abuseBeautiful descriptions, and I love the metaphors. Katrina xx |
| simpleplan13 2006-10-04 ch 1, | abusei love this whole Shakespeare thing... amazing piece.. short but powerful |
| account not in use 2006-09-22 ch 1, | abusem, the words kind of melded together in my mind. amazing. i love that second part-gorgeous. |
| astral boy 2006-09-22 ch 1, | abuseI liked it until the last line. To me it didn't seem to fit, and wasn't up to the standard of the other lines. But I really liked the rest, so maybe that has something to do with it. "blue eyed as if a flooded globe" was very creative and graphic. Funny how we both reappear at the same time, heh. Stupid FP. |
| X.xPrincess.Midnightx.X 2006-09-16 ch 1, | abuseWhoa... awesome poem. I don't know what to say. Great imagery, great symbolism and great work, as usual. Keep it up! |
| B. M. Reed 2006-09-13 ch 1, | abusei love this. it's delicious. |
| smile persephone 2006-09-09 ch 1, | abuseI lust over any hint of a femmeslash reference in anything. This is no exception. I love the allusions to Romeo and Juliet, as well as the switch of roles at the end. Very clever, I must say. 'She eats her flesh like caviar' is such a gritty and strangely sexy line. The imagery that accompanies that is... hot, to say the least. |
| a lonely september 2006-09-08 ch 1, | abuse**! i love this. i havent read anything like it before, and it's fantastic. there's so much to it. it's just perfect. it's a favorite,and i'm not even sure what else to say. i love the last three lines. |
| Aquafied 2006-09-01 ch 1, | abusei think it would all be more kinky if they had killed themselves with chains and rusty nails but that is just me. |
| poetic abortion 2006-08-31 ch 1, | abuseAnd. Oh. My. God. I love you. Whee~! You wrote implicit femmeslash and, uh, you mentioned Shakespeare; so my love is inevitable after reading this. Also, the last line is enough to have me screaming hallilujah and than some. "with a trembling lip and delicacy, she eats her flesh like caviar" - Guh. My brain melts because that is the most grotesque-ly beautiful thing I have ever read as an opening stanza. And, oh my GOD, you had me thinking of Hanible and his total eye-sexing of Clarice and I. Love. This. "she is Shakespear(ian), in love (with her god) " - Gah. That line owns me, so badly. I love it, I love it, such a beautiful line. Love it, love it, love it. "the dagger is in Romeo's hand" - . . . Did I mention that this is amazing and, uh, that I love your poem SO MUCH. Lovely, lovely, lovely. ~* Noelle |
| by His blood 2006-08-31 ch 1, | abuseyou're back -- it's great to see writing from you again. i missed your work around here, and i know a lot of other people did as well. this does not disappoint. 'fingering the flames and peeling each cerise layer' -- beautiful first line. 'blue eyed as if a flooded globe, she asks if we're two of a kind' -- gorgeous. i love the imagery and the simple power conveyed through her words. 'the dagger is in Romeo's hand' -- perfect ending. i love the way you wrote this -- great work, as always. |
| Faithless Juliet 2006-08-31 ch 1, | abuseFascinating; I love how you twisted this story - eating her flesh like caviar - fascinating. I like the added: Juliet is good and obeying (meek almost) a follower, if Romeo killed himself first. A very unique look on the tale. I loved it. Keep up the good work. Much love,Juliet. |