Reviews for A Moment of Horizon

Reviews For: A Moment of Horizon

luostwanderor 2007-09-21 ch 2,	abuseIf only, if only... The woodpecker sighs... The bark on the trees was as soft as the sky... As the wolf waits below, hungry and lonely... She cries to the moon... if only, if only. (From the movie Holes, with the wolf changed to a female.) If only, if only...
chickk in the goal 2007-02-22 ch 1,	abusei loved it. i can totally relate to that feeling and this story makes it especially relatable. in addition, i just had to point out the fact that, having lived in northampton for eleven years (i don't anymore, very unfortunately), i have noticed that so many parts of the town and the landscape surrounding it can sort of generate the same feeling -- and you definitely captured it. p.s. sorry that i'm jsut some random person responding, but i saw you on one of my friends' favorites lists. anyways, amazing job. you are a fabulous writer in general, i think.
Luostwanderor (Lost Love) 2006-11-22 ch 2, anon.	abusesighs Yes, a wonderful fantasy. If only... (cue more happy little fantasies) Since you said you liked my poems, I guess I'll post more of them. - Freedom You seem so desperate, now having nobody to love. I can tell How you hint at these things Jokingly to them I can see through. You are a piece of driftwood waiting to wash ashore. I, a balloon tied to a fence. A falcon jessed to its master's hand. Waiting, waiting. You, something to cling to and I Something to free me from the ropes painfully binding me here. I love you. And you, I? Will you accept me once I tell you? But if you do only because I am the Only one who wants you? I love you. Please, just Love me back. Love me back. be the one to tell me But I know you are open to anyone. not only me. you have already tried to state that anyone Anyone can be yours. I just can't. Maybe, Maybe when we are both alone together I will. but when? when will that happen? Soon. A bleeding hope. Set me free. Set me free. - Invisible Tears So close, so far Loving you. As I cry these invisible tears. Tears of sorrow Tearsof love. Hidden tears pinkandblue falling feathers on the carpet I need you. You, with everyone so open. You need a love. I need you. So close. So far. I need to tell you need to show you how I feel. I just can't. a constant sigh. a storm, waiting, waiting to break, to love. So strong. Why why can't I tell you? a love so strong so contained I can't hold it. can't hold it. as I cry these invisible tears. Anguish. Passion. Need to hold you touch you live together our lives entwined. I want to give you happiness that what you want. Complete you. Set me free. The missing puzzle piece pictures waiting to be completed. These pinkandblue pinkandblue invisible tears. - Hope I think, now that i will never be able to tell you. So helpless in the arms of love lost again beginning to let go losing my grip so helpless nobody to catch me when I finally fall. Bound to the earth sinking, sinking Helpless the world closes above me, only you- You whi I love. My only hope. be the one. the one to say it. Say it, Just be my love. Complete each other. vivid dreams. losing hope. an echo in my soul. Just love me. love me. Love me. all I ask I need to Love you Love me. turbulent. Soft words. Soft skin. so beautiful. Love you. losing hope. Tell you. Tell me. have to know. be mine. be yours. those silently spoken imvisible words said a thoudand times over to you, manifest themselves. write it. say it. Soft words repeating In my dreams. - Clearing Skies Seeing her, now becomes a thrill. Heart thumping. beating. Adrenaling rushing throuh my veins. closer friends now drifting together closer, closer 'till we finally touch. That day has to come soon. One Wish. for She and I to speak alone inside ourselves To know what the other is thinking. then, she can know how I feel. I, complete her. She, complete me. marbles rolling in a funnel closer closer clacking together in a burst of happiness. so overwhelming. Love her. Happily. more hopeful doubt being flushed away, away out so happiness Happiness Love can reign. for now now I know. just wait for that moment the stars fall perfectly into place. that day will come. to love her. just wait. you'll see.
a person you know 2006-11-03 ch 2, anon.	abuseI realy love this one, even more than the first chapter. There's something about it that really puts the picture in your mind of the fall day and the feelings that come with it...amazing imagery all around. Seriously, I want to be in this story, that is how well you set the mood. One suggestion: your ending is really, kinda closure-like. You know? like you're wrapping up an essay. Personally, I'd end it at "and hid the world." I can't really explain why, it just seems to fit the story better, and can let the reader use their imagination for the ending...you can disregard this if you want. Amazing though. One of my favorites :)
plural 2006-10-18 ch 1,	abuseShort and sweet. I like stories that way. You use pretty words and I like the circle of the story. The only thing I would have changed is the use of "said girlfriend" to "her". I think "her" is more elegant, but that's up to you. Very nice. I enjoyed it. :)
Linksdarkhour 2006-09-11 ch 1,	abuseWow...That is amazing. Please Review My new story Lorien! I want you to se! Haha im listneing to spanish rap and it reminds me of you! Dont ask why... ^.^ Ok lovely. Must go read more. -Linky
Nimeneth 2006-09-08 ch 1,	abuseLED, have I ever mentioned that I love your writing style? Because I really do.Bravo. I beg you to post something like this in the future if inspiration hits you again.
FoR rEaSoNs UnKnOwN 2006-09-01 ch 1,	abuseOMG i love this! update soon!

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