so you've managed to only partially capture my entire theme, my ideal in writing. My inspirations revolve around light and darkness, but not heaven or hell. its like... the energies, the cosmos and its opposites coming together to create, and in the end, tearing themselves apart and in turn destroying everything they created. I like it,immensley. And I quote from my own works which totally resonates from your piece, "And I will begin again, at Beginning's End..." except in your case, its quite the opposite...

It's ok, but the word bubble doesn't really fit with the death and decay.

Ahh... I think you and I may share many of the same interests in writing. I guess it runs in the family. :)

I like your descriptions, but of course you have left me wanting more.

Oohh, very juicy! (Intriguing I mean) I wonder what race or species the character here is. Weeping over their dead family, could it be a mythological creature, or a race you created yourself?

Write more, please. (And if you can, read my story too?)

Very nicely done. Your description of the scene is intriguing. I can't wait to find out what follows. It's a very captivating beginning.