Witty phrasing and an interesting topic; I liked the metre best of all though, and the last three lines. It's good to see some more wit in poems, and someone casting light on the tragic issue of humanity's blindness. Keep up the good work, please.

nice singsongy rhythm, and it's moving though the subject has been done before and in this way. i guess it's a subject that that's ok, isn't it...pretty good words. i like "Who cares if the synapses slow?" and that stanza especially.

Bleak but true, I really liked that. Especially the line, "Nothing but rustAnd mad dancing dust" Really well written.