Nice has a lot chapter too, written very nicely too

yo there! sorry if i haven't read this for a long time, heh. anyway, wassup with the cliffie? no i hate cliffies! you MUST continue!

I'm sorry I got way too confused. I'm assuming Sheesha was using last names to refer to those other two. But it also seemed like Bubi didn't care Yuiko had a Shikigami, even though Yuiko was suprised to see one at first. I think the story could use better grounding before you start diving into characters left and right and going into possible multiple plot points. What kind of city do they live in? Is it a realistic world or a magical one? The setting should be explained early on in the story.

Uh oh! What happened this time! Po Babi! Lol! UPDATE!

*jumps up and down* I likey!

squeal! so cute! yuiko, dont die! .

update soon plz

O-O How cruel you are to me! She can't JUST DIE! Wa! Update!

O-O! Ahh! who? what? huh? ahh! anticapation!

this is very good. I suggest you keep writing the story. PLEASE?

()-()! UPDATE SOON! ITS SOO AWESOME! ah!

Hm...all I can say is that when you do dialouge, make sure that there's space between them, so it won't look so confusing. But, other than that-I off to read the next chapter. Ta!

adaku-chan

I really like this chapter! I will read more now!

Well that was short, but sweet.. Keep writing! I want to know what happens next! GOOD luck! Until next review.. Update sooN!

Lol that was funny. Try describing more, btw.. Okay now, will go to the next chapter _

Nice one, too. Hm.. introduction of more characters..cool. Although, maybe you should try another writing style, your current one is kind of confusing.. But, still fun and entertaining, of course. _

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