That's a different point of view...excellent description and emotion. There's a nice story behind this, fantastical I think, though that could be only how I think and that your imagery is well-constructed...or not constructed at all, as it is when words "don't let you go".

I like this. It was expressed well, though it could be trimmed down a bit. I like "He whispered in the air between them/Which was only theirs"

Eh, call me sour today but I did not like this one has much as your other works. It's a bit overbearing due to the intense emotion and language - like a poem that sort of jumps on you and begins to attack. I do appreciate the clarity and the way you organize your thoughts. I also thought the italics were a nice add. Great work, though, practice does make perfect. So don't let my negativity stop you from continuing. : ) Keep writing, s.

This poem is excellently written and the composition is flawless, a mixture of solid events intermingled with a complex thought process. Though the topic is a fairly generic one, some might even say redundant, it is a fantastic poem, and even in such a short amount of space, the reader becomes sympathetic and attached to the subjects. Nice work.

AMAZING! This was GREAT! Everything about it was wonderful- every line perfect. Do you have more poems? I'll go look...