It's got some really interesting conflicting imaagery, and the fact that you made it a block of tyext actually makes it seem much more desperate. Good work!

Padimate: okay i understand the mustang thing now...i was soo confused at first...lol

Interesting. The title is different? Anyways, it's good and the way it's written, you can actually kind of feel this dense air that won't fill your lungs.

P.S.Yes, I know Toro means bull. The word Mustang is just to describe the bull, so really, Toro fits. I only used mustang because I wanted to get the idea of a very wild, not just angry bull. Unfortunately, that poem is a tad "loose." Sorry 'bout that..

"what's become of the love between your thighs"

gah, wonderful.

i took this as a metaphor - the addict speaking to his high - i hope that's right. if it is, then you did a wonderful job and way to go! and if it's not, well i'm sorry. either you didn't write the piece very well, or i'm stupid.

but whatever the meaning, this poem evokes strong, dirty feelings. it's so raw, and that's where the beauty is from. good work.

*lily